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Old 12-30-2016, 08:39 PM   #6
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2k - damnit 2k, write to your image! this is definitely an open mic or cypher piece.

Coup - hey this was a great piece, it definitely worked well with your image. I enjoyed this segment in particular,

Western Christian logic. Long ago left prophet Jesus for composite.
Bent a hardened revolutionary into the oddest gossip.
All that's promised, all that's honest: packaged into product.
Gospel is now misty comet. Blasted into space by solid rocket.

those lines were a great transition from observation to assertion. great work Coup! very happy to see you back. the ending of your first stanza was impeccable as well. very direct work from you here, a change of tone from what I remember. but it has been a while, indeed! Happy New Year to you good sir.

MVGT - Coup for writing to his topic, and doing quite well in fact.
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