You should be a bubblegum rapper but if you think ya flowin
I’ll use a Bazooka Joe & open up this wrapper till the pink is showin
(Good opener. Rapper/wrapper is VERY played but you executed it well and gave it a fresh touch. Also had the name play in there so overall nice line.)
This is an all-out war so bullets will clip your shin...head...spine
& when ya look over at AMC the last thing you’ll see is The Thin Red Line
(I haven’t seen this movie but I might have missed a reference but I think I caught everything. AMC and name a movie isn’t too crazy. I just thought this was okay)
I could win dead lyin...instead I got a gurney for your sad journey
This week I’ll murder you & the nigga that dropped you in the tag tourney
(Ha...prob coulda did a bit more with this angle but it was good as it was)
If the K-Ci you, it’ll split you in two so...JoJo don't roll up slow to me
Or I’ma body a singin nigga...guns will tune him up too fast for Jodeci
(Yup I like it. The Jodeci wp came off smooth and was a good tie in. K-Ci was fine too. Only critique is the JoJo and ‘Body a singing nigga’ seem seem like a forced tie in (unless Joe sings lol). Overall good line though).
I’ma stage this...let Boston Celtics but I’m the King & your the pawn
You ran shit till ya saw my Cavs chase ya down on the block like Lebron
(This was cool. Might have tried to do a bit too much. Might have tried to do too much and some concepts came off a bit underdeveloped...ie the sell tix wp didn’t have any tie in to the punch - you kinda just dropped the angle. King and your the pawn came off a bit forced even though I see what you was trying to do. The actual punch was good though. Overall, pretty good line.
Your 1-2 & the flyest on the bench but this shit`ll make God pray bro...
If you scramble or Jet...I’ll catch you & spread you all over Broadway Joe
(Yep, liked this one. Solid name flip, I’m digging the joe Namath reference and overall good closer)
Keep flapping your gums bitch, these knuckles and your face will meet
Set the Barr by whoopin that ass, you'll apologize quicker than a Roseanne Tweet
(This was okay. It wasn’t crazy because there was no double meaning or anything with the punch. Straightforward but it also came off a bit basic)
Sugar in your tank you sweet as fuck, that fag shit i dont support
You probably tease and get balls to the face, should replace Draymond Green on the basketball court
(I like the current event reference and the concept. The wording on this was kinda weird. It just didn’t come off hard and the ‘tease abs get balls to the face’ just didn’t come off right and the whole line was wordy)
I hope this resorts to voilence, got killing down to a science get to fucking know me
I'll leave you dead toungue hanging to the side of ur cheek looking like the Miley Cyrus Emoji
(Yep, liked this)
Your bitch stuffs hoagies to the face, shes turned on by excessivey eating
A cheat day for her is if a man keeps her hunger satisfied the bitch is actually cheating
(Ha this was funny to me. Not rolling on the ground but funny. Shoulda worded it cleaner though)
These two fist beating him senseless, fag better run for the fences
After i split his fucking crown he gonna need 20 stitches and routine trips to the dentist
(This was too much of a statement)
Got The Pound like fucking Benchlifts an easy death wont be that hard
Blood all over your Beshte shells roaring through you like the fucking Lion Guard
(I missed this reference. Tried to google it but I still didn’t catch it. I think this was just too obscure of a reference though)
Very consistent verse from BodySnatcher. Every showing he’s had in his league has been good imo. He did his thing with his typical punch heavy style layered with intricate tie ins. I think your biggest thing is some of the tie ins feel forced and sometimes you teeter on the line of doing too much and it distracts from the punch.
Joe came with it too though but just got out punched in this one. Also had some obscure references that hurt him in this one. Enjoyed the read. I think Body Snatcher took this one.
Mvgt Body Snatcher
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