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Old 07-03-2020, 07:03 PM   #3
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Some nice imagery being thrown around in here, although the story did seem to drift in the middle. Rhyme scheme was functional, use of vocab was solid. I always like a topical take on a not-so-well travelled road. Definitely see potential here. Focused a little more on the narrative and the quality will improve. Solid work.
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