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Old 06-26-2020, 03:00 AM   #2
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Pieces of this were cool, and evoked some good imagery, especially in the opening few lines, feel like you rambled a bit on the coffee but it was something I agreed with and it didn't really feel out of place per say just dragged a little long, liked the imagery like I said and the closing lines wrapped it up nicely, felt audio-esque. Good drop
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