A hard to tackle topic but you approached it with care and told a sad story which is sadly too often relatable. Some real stand out lines in here:
'Knuckles & knuckles eruptin' to rupture his shell
To a weak upholdin', raised by the buckles on belts'
'How can you be free when violence is used to silence your pain?'
Rhyme scheme was mostly on point, good multi's, a bit of awkward wording here and there but you kept the narrative focused from start to finish. Ever been in the GWL? I reckon you'd fit in pretty well over there.
Nice work, keep posting.
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