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Old 09-07-2014, 07:58 PM   #11
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Oats, well crafted verse. Didnt tie into the topic til the end of the verse which is a good thing. Rhyming mechanics were on point.
These lines stood out..


earth began as flat and central, man's signature flawed prediction:
Go too far and you'll fall off - into the middle of all existence
Stuck in traditional knowledge, smitten by all our typical botched admissions
Our physical laws are trivial novels - written as cosmic fiction
First there was only one Sun, the pinnacle of majesty!
...except for all the other solar systems riddled through the galaxy


Diode cool piece. Nice flow
this bar was dope..

vagina tears, crowns, delivery head down
placenta surfs a wave of crimson through the birth canal


Conclusion: Oats had a better more creative take on the topic. Both verses were good tho
Vote = Oats
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