Candy -
good work this time on this piece, you've always been pretty clean with the pen here. you did nice with good colorful imagery and nice verse stanza. your wording is cool, and so is this verse. good work.
Scar -
good verse man, you did great. the imagery was really fantastic - and the story-line was good and effective. very good work on this piece scar. nice one man.
overall -
good battle, but scar won this battle with better use of language arts
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