Preferred Adonis writing to IamBenT's in this instance. It feels like Adonis better captured the duality of the image, e.g., " Will she scorch my leaves? Giving a fine char to my bark," great contrasting of different language to evoke response. IamBenT's was also a well crafted story but it felt like (excluding perhaps the conclusion section) it lacked this aspect of duality that Adonis writing had. Voting for Adonis.
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