Kannon. I liked the way you developed your characters but felt as though the limitations of this tourney kept you from expanding the piece to its full ppotential . obviously every piece will suffer from this but there were some dimensions that were lacking I felt. Although there were multiple family members that you showed I thought it would be better if you had even a more holistic description of the family tree. I guess I'm saying is I liked it but the key to this tourney is the choice of concept that won't feel like it's missing something when restricted to ten lines.
Pent. I think your first line was pretty bland scene setting that was kind of a waste of real estate. The verse was summed up nicely in ten lines though and the guerilla radio quote was pretty provoking. Also good
Voting Kannon for a more sprawling piece in ten lines although I had my complaints.
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