Lol
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Waiting in my trench, like a turn of the century soldier
I tried So Hard and all I have to show for it is some folk art
Humphrey Bogart. I need another take
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Doesn’t dead man write everything in lower case letters? I think you forgot to do that part. Anyway, I dug the Humphrey Bogart inclusion and how you tied it into “I need another take”. Clever.
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It's my turn to take the test. Whisper the answers
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Dope
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You changed the day we heard of Molly's cancer
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Lmao you’re out of control.
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Please don't call me whimsical
A frolicking romancer
In the early days
I heard you say to end the third act of the play
Well. Make peace with me
And change scenery. No more greenery
The spice garden wilts in your absence
Filled up with absinthe. I don't water it
Yet I tolerate all of it
until the day we call it quits.
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Ended strongly. Rhythm. Flow. Pacing. Language. Imagery. Emotion. It had a good balance of everything listed.
Overall, this was entertaining. I enjoyed it.