[Objective]

Originally Posted by symetrik

cool thanks for the props. I was psyched to go vs objective, I play by the competitive adage of "better opponents make you better".

question, to clarify: one of my glaring weaknesses (from what I'm gathering) is jumping, where like, I don't tie things together well (or... don't make it clear it's a jump) and I don't flesh out the story enough. would that be a good summary?

figuring out what to improve on.

I think so too. I look upon you as a strong competitor tbh, I didn't expect to win this round so what I went for was a rather easy to follow story that wasn't too abstract with rather straight forward language and a story/plot that could possibly surpass the abstract and fluent language and flow.

There needs to be a certain fluent flow in the story as well, if the story is easy to follow and smooth in terms of how it progresses you can score a lot of points on that alone if it follows a common theme as well. The way I think of a jump is kind of similar to a punchline, the next sentence/paragraph feeds off of the last one and use context clues to string it all together, so when you go for a jump make sure that the next connects enough to the previous parts to keep it going to maintain the flow of the story while simultaneously jumping in time, just don't drift too far away from where you initially started unless you're consciously doing it on purpose knowing readers need to follow your lead on this as well.

Someone better might be cool enough to say something about this, whether I'm on point or not but that's the feeling I got when it comes to writing topicals. It doesn't matter if it's abstract as fuck or not, all it needs is to follow a common theme good enough for the verse itself to matter with all its lines and connections.