Blue, first topical ive seen from you, your so profilic in battling so I didn’t know what to expect. the piece is very thoughtful, flows well, very easy to read. the idea of religion being wiped out from humanity is quite thought provoking n a great topic to take on, I think more could have been done here but ill take it.
Adonis, short and sweet, some nice imagery, (your forte) nice feel to it at times, its a formula that only really works if the opponent comes with a huge convoluted piece to overshadow it with (your) simplicity, probably not enough engaging as the other verse so tactic didn’t work this time.
“Being lost in a breeze watching rustling leaves
A buzzing that beams, natures fluttering wings”… niicee btw
v/ blue, just a lil more engaging
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