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Vote1:

DVS vs Objective

DVS opted for more a topical this week, over a story, which is quite rarely seen these days in truth and often when you do, they're a kind of hybrid between the two things and not just a straight up topical. I felt this was. I've seen DVS speak previously on how sometimes metaphor is a strong literary handle to lean on, and I can't help but feel he executed that very well this week. He did great. The style isn't maybe one we're as familiar with here at NC now, but it's definitely one the likes of PR regulars will be. Myself included. This broken down bar style works well when done this smoothly, it comes off effortlessly even if it's far from it. Don't let that get overlooked here, it's the sign of a great writer. The easier the read the better. It's clean, concise, and constructed very well. This is probably my fave verse so far in voting this week. Again, props on the topic and flipping it into a more personal metaphorical idea rather than a story of some sort because that's rarely seen these days and that was refreshing to me.

Objective: This read to me like Ill Bill doing horrorcore or some shit haha! The rhyme placement largely helped, especially given the line lengths, and it read like a bombardment of rhymes being thrown down, partly because of your Norweigianness, partly because of your desire to go all in this week. The story was pretty cool, high action, maybe a bit of sci fi which is definitely to my tastes. I think maybe the language barrier held you back somewhat, some lines were convoluted and even though you did well you came up against a fantastic writer in DVS this week who pipped you to the post in several categories and nullified what you did well. I tend to think of topical battle scoring a bit like boxing, and he was just ahead on points throughout so I can't see any other outcome. That's the best analogy I can think of right now to describe my decision. Objective was good, DVS was even better this time out.

Vote 2:

DVS

I assume you do audio cuz of the way this read, though dropping some filler words would have smoothed it (at least for me).
To get it out of the way, repeating rhymes bother the piss out of me.

Quote:
every burnt bridge is a guide light to my friends
is cool, works one way or another.

Quote:
bloom into my scar garden
neh. I get the idea but, "bloom" seems just too pretty of a word for this.

Quote:
lips stitched, but only lipstick could part it
my favourite line. creates the feeling of a dead relationship except when they're in public.

... stanzas dances hopelessly hoping it matters

dope flow on this.

I like the idea of "never saids".


Objective

cool, now I've seen something you wrote and know which way to predict.

Quote:
mission success' done quarterly, orderly put we're top secret assassins / picked from soldiers missing in action...
clean af.

Quote:
living on a space station... feels like a playstation / beckoning echoing... loneliness and frustration
ehh. weakest line in the piece to me.

Quote:
... fade to the core as scotch blessed the taste of my friend Damien's sword
caught my eye, smooth, but I'm annoyed it caught my eye cuz I can't decipher it.

Quote:
...screaming: 'shit, what was it worth?' / ... leaving in ships, aimed for the earth
dope ending.

the fucking plural "alien invasions" -> "doesn't" tripped me for a second but besides that nothing much else stopped me from enjoying this entire piece. I know one of the several I'm gonna take an L to, and definitely one of the ones I'm gonna learn a lot from.

mvgt - Objective