I liked this part even tho I'm questioning "every breathed endorphins" a bit:
I'm a demon swordsman, seethe remorseless; breathing corpses every breathed endorphins
Seize the orifice, leafs of scorches; white winter blizzards frost freeze and torture
Also, did you reference Code Geass with the Geass-line? Ruroni Kenshin brings me back for sure, that show to me is what DBZ is to most others. Keep writing and listen to feedback etc.
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I'm not a slave for entertainment, I'm entertainments personal slave,
So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave.
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