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Old 11-27-2019, 07:50 PM   #9
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Originally Posted by Exis View Post
Ayo,

The casualties of an apallin' livin'
Meet my dyin' homie, Yo I call him liver
I mourn him, The impendin' death is soberin'
Irony's my mornin' ritual pourin' beer all over him
Confessing your vices while personifying your liver. Cool concept.

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Tonight's tab - Good times with tequila, Ill tomorrow
Salt for happy, Lime for sad - Booze to kill the horror
But I can't drown the sorrows, I have to slowly choke them emotions
The alcohol strokes envelopes, Slows and cloaks them in doses
A strain that's a dangerous play we play at
My brain's got a usb port, Drink inserted a game pad
Controllin' my movements, Steerin' towards new mistakes
Upholdin' improvement, Leadin' towards abuse and hate
Me and my personal darkness waitin' for light to touch us
All sliced up and ruptured from countless fights and ruckus
Under the influence - No not really under it, It's self inflicted
The human hand holdin' liquid knows pain beyond Hell's restrictions
A soberin' alcoholic? Nah when it comes to creeds and callings
The bitter truth is - I'm a drunkenin' teetotaler
The kidneys feel a cold caress and regret shows your set
Close to death? Yet really dead - But just doesn't fuckin' know it yet.
Yo, this was flames. The content seemed very real. There was a certain level of poetic sadness and empathy contained within each line. It didn't appear to be contrived or inauthentic. Instead it read as if it came from a place of self experience. In fact, while reading it I was able to pull from my own accounts with alcohol to verify the authenticity of your words and concepts. Good shit, Ex. Really good shit!


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Stoic. Breath; calm. Arms; opened, stretched. Let go, accept
No-one gets tuh hold forever under loathsome effort
Fuck the whole consensus, if its faux, know myself; the sole endeavour
Struck the globe it open vectored, I’m so connected
Life's burdens promote growth; its lessons, notice blessings
No distressing. Adapt. I'm no adept, but don't be so inept,
Mind searches for where the soul is kept, suggest the golden essence -
I was having trouble following this piece, because I was expecting it to piggyback off of the previous theme, however, once I got to final line quoted above I realized this was something completely different. On another note. "Mind searches for where the soul is kept" is dope as fuck. Very esoteric. I like shit like that.

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In yuh solar plexus tuh find a purpose, these unconscious tides i surf up in
While you deny insurgence, stuck, just reside on surfaces, images, idol worshippin,
Worthless. The universe is designed perfect, why disturb it? In service, I write surplus
Ahhh....I'm getting a very spoken word type of vibe from this. "The universe is designed perfect, why disturb it?" Clearly, there is no real answer to that question, but I just like the way that it sounds when read aloud. It seems very omniscient-ish, but in truth I'm not even sure what it is you're trying to get at here.

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Divine verses, you wood try tuh box me in bitch nigga, i dont like hearses -
S'just encumbering, fuckin underlings, bury me in contact with my Mothers skin
The ALL is in All, Natural Law, I’m on that, and some other things
Thunder king, God give me strength to combat what the trouble brings
All me nigga, glory nigga, - how can i not ask for the suffering?
...When its purifying?...such a sublime fool that i am. whose the wise man?
Crucified them. I spin a verse so dense, i can pull the sky in.
Lunar cycles, remote viewing, the moons my iris, staring at these human hybrids
Ask a man what he do for a living...they fuck around & tell you what they do for dying.

Live nigga.

This section was some of the dopest shit I've read in months! Murdered it. 187!

Dope collab from top to bottom, fellas. Bless us with a follow up. Peace.
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