Hush had the most accurate criticism in this thread.
This is a ghost thread, re-upped. It's interesting (OH IS IT) to see the growth of one of the best writers on this site, from this. It's good, in terms of rhyming and pace and rhyming and pace. The best Zen pieces were so caustic and personal, occasionally touching on the mechanical nature, with rhymes, of something like this. Interesting (OH IS IT) to read in retrospect.
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If I ventured in the slipstream
Between the viaducts of your dreams
Where immobil steel rims crack
And the ditch in the back road stop
Could you find me?
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