First and foremost, good that you guys showed up. Verse 1 trump wasnt bad, you gotta work on the wording a bit.
You have the multis down, but overwording your lines make the concepts simple or not, not hit and come off as statements.
Jus gotta work on being a bit more crisp and concise. That will add some sting/surprise back into ur verse. Verse 2 was a bit more polished, where you were able to take better angles on your concepts.
Vonn Miller wasnt bad, i would say just tighten up the wording a bit
v/ Verse 2
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