MMLP took a Space Invaders angle here, with solid rhyming of multiple syllables throughout. Your rhyming is on point. And you set it up to where I wanted to see where it was going and how it would end.
While Master Rock focused on change-agents and their opposition, with some good internal rhyming throughout. I was a bit puzzled by the ending regarding the artifact of truth. But it could just be vague on purpose for effect. There is a "she" in the beginning but that's all you really said about her; that she gave you advice.
This one just came down to personal preference. I liked MMLP's more so he gets the vote.
V MMLP
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