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Old 10-21-2014, 07:32 AM   #6
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I dunno, I liked both verses in different respects, Mike Wrecka had the flow downpat. Butter smooth right throughout. It comes off effortless when it's far from it, so many people struggle with 'flow' in text, Mike doesn't here. It's almost too smooth for text to appreciate it and, admittedly, it does come off a little bland from a purely text point of view because of that.

Certain's read to me as if it was the better verse because it had more content, more punchline orientated, more formatted for what it was - a text verse. You would struggle fitting it to a beat, though. I liked it, don't get me wrong, this isn't a slight on him at all... both verses were good, I just enjoyed different things from both, and disliked things from both also.

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