Hey Ad, just stopping by to show some love, my man. you know what i noticed? "Of" is often the go-to preposition for poetry-style writers. i just recently realize that cause i do it too at times lulz. anyway man this is a sad poem. i think its about a breakup and the painful aftermath. lots of truth here as im sure we all have these experiences. you break up, but usually its a cry for something, but then they just kind of move on and that shit in itself is like throwing salt in a wound while trying to cauterize it with molten lava infested with cryptonite, when your supposed to be superman.
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But once I turned to excavate my escape there was no longer weakness in her walls
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that was great.
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Monotony is a bear trap with its teeth in my ankle...
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this line felt off. i think i get it, like repetition or habit will lead to some kind of stasis but the analogy itself like bear trap somehow felt off idk lul
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Should have ignored that spark in the dark, my supposed saving grace
That "guiding light" was just the last of the embers dying in this colorless, fleeting place
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that was awesome.