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Old 03-10-2021, 02:23 AM   #12
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[QUOTE=Sinacog;801275]In the green plains were stars born; stars scorn -- stars scorn --
STARS SCORN -- STARS SCORN -- STARS BORN -- STARS BORN --
I am stars scorn -- STARS BORN -- I am born from a red PLANET
I am red planet -- RED PLANET -- BLUE/BLEW planet -- BLUE/BLEW PLANET


I’ve noticed you repeating the themes / wordplay a lot recently. Sin feeling himself lately on some interplanetary shit. Dope. I fuck with it more than all these other guys. The celestial body bodying opponents because he’s out of this word. Feeling the higher astral plane you’re on and it’s a welcome change from the religious undertones in your most recent work.

I am the OMNIFCIENT ZING! I had sex with woman in the zing!

Did you mean ass here, you fucked her in the ass? If so, good one. Buttsex FTW.

I am spring; the green grassy hills of the conundrum gallows of HELL..

Nice contrast here and good misdirection used. Green grassy hills of... THE GALLOWS OF HELL! I liked it.

For I am a STARS SCORN -- STARS SCORN -- I am the malevolent HORNS
BENEVOLENT HORNS -- settle the score with metal swords

The final hanging multi was a nice touch, kept me on edge as the scheme transformed.

I am the DECIETFUL SER PINT -- the serpent of EAZEN
The snake of eden; appeasing the WINTER SEASON
I am the conundrum GALLOWS OF HELL: VAIN COMPEL
THE GREEN MALAISE WAS THE HAZE FOR THE CONUNDRUM GALLOWS OF HELL..

Cool tie-in back to the beginning of the verse from a thematic POV.
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