Adonis, neat little verse.. interesting angle on your topic, borderline stretched to me. A few references throughout, enough to lure the reader (and voter) around for the trip.mechwnically sound with bouncy flow . Imaginative imagery for things you don't see unique spins of, seldom does someone chose to write about the writing process.
Razah, I really liked this verse. Although I felt there were comparably lose connections to the topic as your opponents verse however your angle was less cooquial and managed to draw me in more. The confusing of puzzles line felt unnatural but the rest really worked for me. You too tried to tien it in with the closer but we're more successful imo.
+1 Razah
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