[dead man]

yeah this was a really impressive piece of rhyme-work. i dont think people fully appreciate how well articulated this was. it takes quite a vocabulary to make conceptual writing work as well as this did, especially considering the length. ill just go ahead and pick out some of my favorite little segments. there were plenty

before a beast a basilisk, always breathing acidous,
but after a body as broken as a beadless abacus,

blasting at a barracks, ballistic ammunition browning automatic.
barbiturate addict, binged alcohol, benzo’s, analgesics, behaviour affected,
blunted avolition, became anaesthetic, bored apathetic.
but afterwards became a behemoth across battle arenas,
before amphitheatres, basically atheist believer,
abiogenesis – before archosaurs, before animals, before amoebas.
a billion ages back, aminoacid blocks,
ancestral bacteria appeared before any bony arthropods.
Archaea brought across by asteroid belts accompanied by acid base acetate,
became animate, basic adaptations, afterwards bipedal apes.
but anyway beaten absolutely black and blue, and baselessly accused,
became amused by alien beings always blamed as aerial balloons,
attention barely attuned, buried alive between a bonsai and bamboo.
among blood and bones,
and born again brandishing arrows bows and braggadocio.

this entire part honestly. i could not find a single line i felt was unworthy of quote.

bonsai and bamboo was probably my favorite. but the entire segment on biological life formation / evolution was pretty nuts.

All bars appall, became antiwar, Bronze Age bowl anthropologist,
Breathe antioxidants but adsorb bicarbonates.
Androgynous bitches appear beastly,
Approximately, beasts appear briefly, appendages beady,
Ageless, baseless, an agnostic believing after abdominal bleeding,
Ancient blasphemer as brutal as battle armies besieging.

lol'd at third line and like i said, the ability to keep your rhythm / rhymes so succinct while creating great descriptives, moreover using this device, is admirable to say the least..

thanks for this one zygote. always an honor sir..




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