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Old 05-26-2020, 10:20 PM   #3
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you know i really enjoy these verses. its not too caught up on high power concepts, just a straight up exercise on rhyme and flow with some cool swag thrown in for measure. this particular segment was interesting to me, rhyme scheme-wise

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several blows permanently damaging temporal lobes
shining like emerald glow on you basement dwellers
blatant failures being misled by red herrings
think the board is slow - check your bearings
not sure how to explain but its such a unique rhyme scheme. it was multi, multi then transition into another rhyme -2nd- line which then transitioned into another rhyme -3rd line- then callback to original multi with 'the board is slow' lulz. i don't think i've ever seen that type of scheme. it shouldnt work but somehow it does. really cool my man.
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