Netcees - View Single Post - Week 1: Certain vs. Frank [Certain wins, 7-0.]

Pinot Grij · 10-06-2014, 01:14 AM

Certain, this was a really fresh take. Honestly, the rhyming in this piece was not perfect (especially in the 1st stanza - a little shaky) but the sheer imagination behind what you did really impressed me. You had an incredible concept, a well-developed character, in-depth descriptions and a fully-formed storyline. I think you hit all the high notes that you could've.

Frank - opposite effect from Certain - the rhyming is what stood out the most. Your eally reeled it in and showed off some technical prowess - I was engaged by the craftsmanship of it. The whole "stunk, skunk, blunt, sucked" scheme... well, sucked. But other than that this was good. Story-wise, you just couldn't hit the height that Certain did with his rendition of the topic.

Vote - Certain

10-06-2014, 01:14 AM	#10
Pinot Grij Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 863 Battle Record: 23-19 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night 2 - Write Week V - Netcees Battle League (2x) - Winter Topical II - 1-2 Punch league Rep Power: 29195060	Certain, this was a really fresh take. Honestly, the rhyming in this piece was not perfect (especially in the 1st stanza - a little shaky) but the sheer imagination behind what you did really impressed me. You had an incredible concept, a well-developed character, in-depth descriptions and a fully-formed storyline. I think you hit all the high notes that you could've. Frank - opposite effect from Certain - the rhyming is what stood out the most. Your eally reeled it in and showed off some technical prowess - I was engaged by the craftsmanship of it. The whole "stunk, skunk, blunt, sucked" scheme... well, sucked. But other than that this was good. Story-wise, you just couldn't hit the height that Certain did with his rendition of the topic. Vote - Certain __________________ Topical C.R.E.A.M.