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Old 02-18-2018, 12:18 PM   #9
Flow
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In terms of feedback, id be surprised if you had won if your opponent showed. Your sort of writing a diss verse where you should be sort of doing set up and punch. Think about a stand up comic, specifically one like Jimmy Carr. He will send you one way with something innocent enough (the set up) then its flipped it into an insult or joke an taken a different way then you expected (the punchline). Once you have that format you want to look at how you flip, usually a turn of phrase or wordplay, but be creative an dont lose your style. Finally content, the sting comes from something personal, research who your facing. Anyway best advice i can give.

Id advise looking at karaoke destroyer and Orc for clean clear cut set up and punches as a guide
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