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Two of my oldest e-friends facing up, eh?

Lets see what you've got.

Trap: I like the style for the most part, it's maybe not as standard format we're used to reading in text but largely it works for you and I can catch the flow. I almost enjoyed the sort of run-on sentence or thoughts kind of feel to this, and you went an almost YDK-esque route of self reflection, maybe there's something in that, how given no topic to play with shows certain people turn into themselves and pick apart their own misgivings? Anyway, I'm just musing at this point, it was felt but it was all too abrupt for me and kind of felt incomplete or unfinished.

Witty: This one was almost trademark you, a little sloppy in some parts, but largely great at flipping the scheming back and forth and turning it inside out and changing it up. The great thing about the storytelling in this is that it has on a whole a natural running almost conversationalist tone to it. It reads very easily for the most part, and the broken-down-bar style gives you a little more freedom in that sense to toy with the schemes but it works for you. The whole rape thing has been done, as you know, but the bind us together idea was nicely worded even if it reminded me of Brother Ali's "If i can't have you, nobody will" tbh. I'm a sucker for the darker stuff, I guess, and that coupled with the technical merit was enough to win me over here.

Vote - Witty