NYC, I really like your futuristic, post apocalyptic setting. Your imagery explained the scene and painted a great picture in my head. Kind of gave me Gears of War vibes, I'm not quite sure why my mind went exactly to that but I really appreciated your vocabulary and the way you put the scenary and plot together. Good work.
Breathless, I liked your descriptive approach as well. It was a cool little section where I almost felt like I was going on the trip for your character, alas, I thought there were things you could have expanded on more and put more of a effort into the piece overall. Wasn't a bad verse, but NYC's took the cake here. Awesome picture he painted. Good work fellas
V/Nyc
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