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Flo Real you got skipped, i got you
pros: well, you're still finding your voice i think. if you are the catalyst for your collabs with Lars, you have very strong topic selection that I always eventually end up reading. which is rare and an underrated skill. that persistence of memory/ Dali line was very strong.
cons: could pay a lot more attention to punctuation, specifically. still not past that new writer phase of lackluster descriptive details, which is fine.. for every three drops you key, you should write one that you put a lot of time and effort into crafting... the balance between off-the-top and from the heart is pretty key to elevating
do more solo projects
Dead Man
pros: verses are a nicely balanced mix of personal insight and mass appeal, blended with multi-layered metaphors/ figurative language. lyrical shadow puppets in Aristotles cave. or Plato. one of those greek faggots. unapproachable in terms of signature style. bleeds schemes well.
cons: doesn't collab nearly enough, which always brings out the best of you and your partner's writing. see Blackpancake. sometimes your verses just come across as scatterings of Blacketh concepts and dystopian malaise