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Jah's was simple yet I liked it..had couple good quotes in there. It was more of a poem than a topical which is cool but for a battle the repetition of phrases used kinda hurt your verse imo.
"
Aware fully of the smokers bellowing free
Temptation staining my chattering teeth
Aroused by the smell of burning nicotine
A pleasure more sultry than the birds and the bees "

was nice though. Liked that

Split was more advances in his verse...making all 16 lines count for something, at least to me. From the beginning stages of smoking to the end-ish of it as quitting but not really quitting was dope, and the rhyme schemes changing up throughout. Just on another level with his verse here obviously, to me anyways.

"Five am. Drunk. parties over the neighbors said. Hardly sober.
Sunk into complacency. a single cig, she said just take it please...
Breathing in. Harsh at first, you'll get used to the coughing bursts.
Far concerns.. The end, the darkness that guards my urn."

That hit for me. Esp. being a smoker


V/Split. Jah's was cool too don't get me wrong, but as I said Split was just a few steps ahead with his verse. Both were good reads keep up the writing fellers.