[Split]

I wish there was a topic. :/


dead man.
one degree of separation, strong imagery. felt very emotionally detached from your first 12 or so lines, was feeling it at the end and in retrospect

interesting piece about a familial death. bridging the gap between your feelings on a subject and your knowledge of it, and where they meet in the middle at the tie clip. it was a pretty good piece, not my favorite of yours.


td5/ soulstice/ Frank.
liked the first verse a lot. well chosen words. actually, just really well constructed lines. bits of truth placed in a mosaic of decline.

the three sections individually were fantastic, but did not stitch together very well IMO. they could be seen as three views of society's past, present, and future or whatever but tbh that ideology is so common it is not even a proper story. thematically, one big cliche. it was a decent piece but came off uninspired.


Close battle. each piece had its merits and flaws, I feel like there is more substance and lasting appeal to Dead Man's verse

V/ Black