First it's strange voting without having a specific topic known, as relation to the topic is usually one of the major aspects to base each vote on. The writing from deadman was unexpected really, in the usual style but the content differed greatly. It seemed deliberate, there were no half-sentences and one-liner phrases. The emotional response it managed to elicit was great, don't want to appear like this is flattery praising or over-exaggeration but it was beautiful writing really. Everything contributed to the emotional effect, from the focus on the small details linked to the big memories, to the pacing with the slow revelations at the start compared with the later parts where more and more is revealed in a short space. Also, it was deeper than just a story, the discussion of the Grandfather before the Father being one example of the theme of the systemic aspects present in relationships. It was so enjoyable because it worked on these two levels, both as a story with a emotional base and also as a discussion of people on a interaction/relationship-level rather than people on a individual-level.
I interpreted Topicaldood5's breaking up of the story into 3 sections, as perspectives of 2 consecutive generations, this was also influenced by the title "Beyond the Dream." Interpreted section i) as the first generation, the writing indicating themes of struggle for a better future E.g., " - Sodden, coughing for oxygen - to reach a higher caste for our daughters." Section ii) the ungrateful generation, the language was markedly different from section i, whereas section i had a different culture feel to it, section ii was very westernized. Strong and subtle writing to show the difference between the preceding section " Built out of our blood and our tears and our stolen sweat" and this section " Just pop the popcorn, light the j, pass the remote..." Interpreted section iii) as the the meta-view of the entire system, where either first generation hard-worker or second generation "Luis Vuitton" bag enthusiast, the same system still applies. It was expressed really well the language like "Zirconium-Labyrinth" and "Petroleum-Palace" great contrasting language between nature and the man made. As a whole, the progression between section i - ii and the final section drawing both sections together was excellent. Voting for deadman.
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