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StarFaggot · 07-16-2013, 12:24 AM

Ok so we started off this piece with a lion king reference and it wasn't a meta it was to be taken literally... LOL

*looks at title* .... Oh okay maybe it ties in *keeps reading*

Look beyond parental doting to where Satan exists
in algorhythmic form that not even the Matrix resists
as Agent Smith's throne morphs into where Damien sits

this was pretty fluid, pieced together well

you have good and constant use of alliteration which makes it appear as a poetic drop of sorts
i'm truly a hoax. juxtaposing inconclusive and final
our music is tribal. hip-hop will see it's future in vinyl

this was dope, set up included

this piece definitely has direction. the execution was good. this was cool for a short drop. you use death in this to mean a physical death but then also an end to old ways. personified death.. I don't know that the is death a recluse ever got answered or was adequately painted in this.. good job and keep writing

07-16-2013, 12:24 AM	#9
StarFaggot Leave you flatlined. Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 5,108 Battle Record: 12-9 Champed - Site Diss 2013 - Tag Team Tournament III Rep Power: 0	Ok so we started off this piece with a lion king reference and it wasn't a meta it was to be taken literally... LOL looks at title .... Oh okay maybe it ties in keeps reading Look beyond parental doting to where Satan exists in algorhythmic form that not even the Matrix resists as Agent Smith's throne morphs into where Damien sits this was pretty fluid, pieced together well you have good and constant use of alliteration which makes it appear as a poetic drop of sorts i'm truly a hoax. juxtaposing inconclusive and final our music is tribal. hip-hop will see it's future in vinyl this was dope, set up included this piece definitely has direction. the execution was good. this was cool for a short drop. you use death in this to mean a physical death but then also an end to old ways. personified death.. I don't know that the is death a recluse ever got answered or was adequately painted in this.. good job and keep writing __________________ [B][CENTER][SIZE="5"] It's Aero join me at RAPBATTLES[/SIZE][/CENTER][/B]