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Vulgar · 07-15-2013, 12:44 PM

What's up Erebus? Haven't seen you in a long time. This was a nice write. Airy and full of interestingly assembled thoughts.

My wife stirs left and right as she sleeps on my arm,
Awoken, ignoring my attention seeking alarm,
^Cool idea.
A sharp ring that would sting even the hardest of hearing,
The snooze button an apple in the Garden of Eden,
^Nice..
My uniform rests on the dresser with the neatest folds,
Watching teleshopping while scoffing down my tea and toast,
No exactly a breakfast tailor made for kings,
My day starting even earlier than daylight’s is
^Slick.

I was satisfied with the content overall, it was a chill drop. Welcome back to the open mic section.. check this out if you have time: http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=8679 @EtH

Keep doing you

07-15-2013, 12:44 PM	#2
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	What's up Erebus? Haven't seen you in a long time. This was a nice write. Airy and full of interestingly assembled thoughts. My wife stirs left and right as she sleeps on my arm, Awoken, ignoring my attention seeking alarm, ^Cool idea. A sharp ring that would sting even the hardest of hearing, The snooze button an apple in the Garden of Eden, ^Nice.. My uniform rests on the dresser with the neatest folds, Watching teleshopping while scoffing down my tea and toast, No exactly a breakfast tailor made for kings, My day starting even earlier than daylight’s is ^Slick. I was satisfied with the content overall, it was a chill drop. Welcome back to the open mic section.. check this out if you have time: http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=8679 @EtH Keep doing you Last edited by Vulgar; 07-15-2013 at 07:05 PM.