v pofish
while I liked story's inner monologue it was just statements and not much to wrap around the mind, I was looking for instances in time to convey those statements...fish came with a concept of technologies swallowing up the youth and the bigger questions with a decent resolution to the questions and issues he rose...though this line was against his concept
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Now all I see is kids in the sun thinking it makes them vexed
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good lines for 15mins bros
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What is public must be legit, fit for average consumption, don't forget. What is private is handled by pirates, prying loose profits from prosthetics. To tell the difference between: first remain unseen with a steady breath and hope, then listen to the cracks in the wall with a stethoscope.
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