some humble advice, when doing straight up poetry...try to explore the soul of the person or noun u be writing about to give depth to teh piece....you showed the symptoms but to cut in our minds we need to have u put personification on some object to show us...
not bad tho....keep droping
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What is public must be legit, fit for average consumption, don't forget. What is private is handled by pirates, prying loose profits from prosthetics. To tell the difference between: first remain unseen with a steady breath and hope, then listen to the cracks in the wall with a stethoscope.
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