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Old 07-12-2013, 11:35 PM   #6
Vulgar
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JW, lol the baby skull smashing part was cool, but very mild horrorcore. If you'd have given a reason why you smash the skulls of babies, like a humorous reason, it might've been a stronger line.

get a knife to the face for those acceptant of gore
nah, fuck it.. i'd rather choke you to death wit an electrical cord
closet's full of picks, axes, a sledge hammer and swords
a shovel to spread remains underneath the depths of my floor
^was dope.

Geno

Or spray your remains on the wall, caligraphy's a hooligans art
^Ha.

Your talking to a man who can evolve, from hard times to worse
I carry the knowledge with me that the hard times unearthed
^I really like how your rhyme patterns make impact.

Punchin the pearly gates when they lock me the fuck out
Hurtin my hands, damn, nothing left to do but get drunk now
^grimey.

Decent collab overall. If you have time, check out my latest drop on page 1.

Keep doin' it
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