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Old 07-12-2013, 03:59 PM   #8
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Just read this as a bunch of non sequitirs and beautiful rhymes and left satisfied. Your style is very dense, figuratively and literally, and its a credit to you as a writer that its so readable. I'm at work so no quotes but I jotted down what I liked; egyptologist line conceptually, burning abyss rhyme and concept, coconut, afterlife midterm, the Christmas trays scheme, and late fees. Only negative was the Atlantis herds/outlandish words back to back rhyme. Felt clunky.

Don't know the point but the journey is lavish.
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