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Old 07-12-2013, 06:02 AM   #8
Gazette
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Karma is a bitch lines, but nothing could be more inconsiderate
cause Karma is such a nice person.. the pussy aint ever killed shit

ummm, i kinda get the karma / not killing idea but its tenuously delivered n didnt really hit

Open mics, topicals, battles, u name it & he aint smashin it
so its no surprise when I leave Kar wrecked like a traffic accident

kinna obvious one, something this simple is only made worse by using a 'like a' similie, shoulda been more creative w/ it

I spit state of the art shit - classics that be defining the grades
u spit state of the art, shit.. fucked up schemes w/ lines that be played

nice idea, needed a comma after the second 'u spit' ... n just generally better wording

Now karma is defined by what comes around goes around
this much is true
with that orbiting nature its proof ur battles dont revolve around u

ok, lovetap but alright

I know where to put trash like urs, theres no need to get ill
week 16 only means your starting & ending with an L..

meh. you came alot harder in our battle, this one feels rushed n thoughtless



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I cory gunz size as twice that dude, I aint joke'n ..
one bullet'll hit & leave his mugshot on the news like snowden

cory? c'mon now, how you gonna set off w/ a good impression w/ that kinda error, you didnt read ur verse through before u posted it?
punch was alright though.

So watch how u step'n, Bcos u aint that hard to murk
I can aswell leave bootprint on ur face & I dont even have to walk

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Bitch my punchlines is gold, obviously people dug it
Oh gad, if people ever dig your shit is after I bury u faggit

old, ooold concept. n this wasn't delivered well

& that win last week was by a hair's breadth, u shud thank god rookie
Without him it coulda gone 'The other way' like that malcolm movie

not bad, a bit simple

Plus gurls don't have time for u, they see him as less worth
If a chick ever say 'Whatsapp' she's just refer'n to a social network ..

nah, seen too many of these latelty

you had a couple concepts that coould have amounted to something if it weren't for bad wording, and the presentation was horrible, could just be me being picky but the spelling mistakes n messiness of it all was pretty off-putting


v/ lecture for an all round cleaner verse
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