V/ Mike, pretty good I thought...wording could have been stronger/harsher - 'walk in the park' was good as a set up but 'slide' was overdoing it and made it a little corny... still pretty good bar tho
Undead if you need to explain a a bar you should incorporate it into the bar itself... otherwise ppl read the bar like huh? then read the expo and by then it's too late to have any impact and explaining bars seems lame. Was an OK concept but a bit tricky to make the wording work
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