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Old 01-31-2013, 06:18 AM   #6
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,bower" was strange word choice. I thought the multis felt natural and unforced.

The opening was strong, an abstract/ thought-provoking statement to set the mood. the effects of time were a big focus, the uncertainty that comes with it was nicely portrayed.

an embrace that saw dust to stone and stone to a mountain
observing forests tower from the seeds of a flower

That imagery stood out to me, pretty vivid over all. Nice read
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