I read this one and your other one right below it, pretty much have the same thing to say: they were dope, just begged for more. you're def a skilled writer, and I like seeing you have fun with rhyming and bounce schemes around, but I would really like to see a concerted effort from you. like, weave these verbal exercises throughout a more coherent thought or feeling. nah mean?
but that's got little to do with this particular verse. This was dope and fun to read, I like how you came back to the "plural of tooth" bit, nice reprieve of self-awareness which allowed me to forgive you for saying it in the first place lol. good shit
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