YDK came with a pic representation that I saw...as a man standing up to the line of 'government' barricade and corruption...good train of thought, smooth flow and read, nice transitions and unity of the theme in the spirit of the pic. schemes were polished but not too complex, leaning more on a flowing narrative that expressed openly thoughts that a more complex scheme could limit in a way...
Quote:
Like a good shepherd, there with an encouraging word
But we as a people are just the flourishing herd.
So from this point onward I'm leaving the pack
No more breeding with wolves, feeding, with diseases intact.
Im breathing freely for the first time in my life,
Taxing my wages but wont give me a dime for the strife.
Clearly we're nearly at the end of the play
Where the government's the writer telling us what to say.
Land of the free? Home of the brave?
Obviously we're all just the clones of the enslaved.
Let me live
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Nice progression, even some emotion in this...good voice..overall nothign new was explored and this type of expression is so common in us all....new developments and ideas needed to be brought with more insights...that is my only crit.
on the flip Tyson came contrasting in almost every aspect....taking the side of the powers that be...which leaves me guessing he is pointing out the irony of the emerging "Truth" movement and how hypocritical and nonsensical it can be...though I see these things in the "movement" i know that there is an element of truth to it...
the whole piece was a very fresh angle on the common route would take the pic...even me I suppose. It was a legit and convincing tone and argument....a strong voice and some subtle but clever rhyme schemes and methodology in here....so smooth that it could go over looked by some perhaps....
both came less on a storytelling approach and more on a topical straight up in a stream of consciousness...
very good battle
v/tyson
good luck yall