yo @
Animosi T
you aren't bad but you're basically doing longbar which went out of style on any good text site awhile back. the only thing you didn't do too well was wording. think of each bar as a joke, setup and punchline, overwording it will make it less effective. hang around, there should be another 101 thread soon or if not i'm adding more assignments to the nameplays one to give you guys something to work on.