I honestly appreciate the fucking effort rawn just put into deviating a feedback. The verse I told of just write was just to write as an activitst fighting for rights and I forgot to have told him make sure it ties to the right to be gay .... Initially it was actually just supposed to be my personal drop but I was stuck and I felt like I needed am extra or fresh pair of view to leave the verse with a direction but still keep it vague and abstractive and I often find myself doing this so as to try and keep the reader like..."ok... Yeah.... Wait... Oh shit it's about a gay guy fuck that took me for a loop" type of reaction. Which is my fault in writing as I like to look for those responses rather than a fuck the was killer internals and the rhyme scheme was crazy cause to me when I write my main focus is
Story, emotion, imagery and content then follows the rhyme scheme and metaphors instead of it being backwards which I see most people actively use. In the end I want my verses to be different- period. I you read a unanimous verse I'd like to have your head be like- nah dude shit this is storyteller or that's like storyteller and I'd hate to see it other wise cause that's what I wrote for my self recognition. Every writer writes for self claim... But I do so with truth and the deepest emotion any writer puts forth TBH. So what I was going for was this... The beginning and second verse- an activist and exposing nation issues and probable causes to some downfalls and hidden messages that I see that others don't... And then third and closure that same activist fight for a right turns and shows he is fighting for the right to be gay cause it was previous rights that prevented him to accomplish another right that eventually led to his death, because he was gay... He was beaten to death in front of his own damn home and was found by his daughters who called his boyfriend and 911. Seriously fucked up and it is cause some of these rights and the nations non-consistent judicial system being more about politics than anything that it's still on trial when evidence shows the clear 4 who had beat him to death from the street cams even exposing their faces. It's a very emotional piece for me cause it's true hence why some words were also repetitive cause it was just best fit cause it was true and I can't change that emotion
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