Um yeah
Objective - Ur verse came across sing-songy at first, but that tone changed toward the end. I wasn't crazy about the theme, tbh. I felt that if u used some more literary devices it could have been better.
Innovator - Im also not crazy about the run on thought, fragmentation that u used, but thats a personal preference. The tone of ur verse was more deliberate, although I thought some of the punctuation (? --> .) should have been altered. The twist on the ending is what sealed this for imo, other then that it was pretty even.
V- Innovator.
btw ive seen better from both u, and thought u prolly both coulda gone a different direction with this, but u both pretty much took the same approach.
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