Netcees - View Single Post - Contendership Match: Untold vs. FGR

07-03-2013, 03:49 PM

So shady

vs.

foretold
ass on the line

So, yo. Untold's style is literally like I'm reading shit from 03 or 04. Untold you got the jist of shit but your kind of in the wrong time period. Haha. Anyway, a lot of your shit was kind of corny, stretched, forced or a reacchhhh. Like wood panel. Dope wordplay but it doesn't work both ways, one of the ways isn't even english lol. I mean it was a good idea but the wording has to be better on that type of a bar so it hits, because the way you worded it, not only does it not hit, it's probably the biggest miss in the battle. The Cage line as corny and not a very good connection, so it was a miss. The alternate line wasn't even really much of anything, I mean, technically it worked but it was so simple it didn't do much damage. The FGR/FDR line was a super reach, you can't just say "what if your name wasn't really your name, what if I edited your name so it works for this punch" lol feel me? Too shady was cool, not worded the best but well enough to at least hit, that was your best punch of your verse. The F in Way line doesn't work because no one uses that as a saying, like no I in team. Good wordplay, it's just madd forced. You have potential Told you just gotta do work on your wording and thinking of some better concepts. Foretold was cool for FGR, kind of simple. Stop flipping butler was stupid, obviously filler/throw away shit. Macho man Randy savage lines are played as fuck. Been used for awhile now basically the same way yours was, but worded better. Bye/bi? Seriously. Keep using wp like that you'll be smellin' da feet. Ass on the line was good, fresh flip, decent wording, it hits. Have her back was bleh, good wording but old used out concept. Decent battle, both have potential. I got FGR though.

TLDR;

V/ FGR

EDIT:

I missed the alternate/all turn 8 wordplay. Personally, I say alternate with the 'it' suffix and not the 'ate' suffix. I also know people say it both ways, so it isn't forced. I didn't even think there was wordplay, I was saying the connection was forced. Do to this evidence, I have both with 2 quotes and I like Told's better with the Alternate line being the LOTB.

TLDR;

V/ Untold

07-03-2013, 03:49 PM	#10
Meth Guest Posts: n/a	So shady vs. foretold ass on the line So, yo. Untold's style is literally like I'm reading shit from 03 or 04. Untold you got the jist of shit but your kind of in the wrong time period. Haha. Anyway, a lot of your shit was kind of corny, stretched, forced or a reacchhhh. Like wood panel. Dope wordplay but it doesn't work both ways, one of the ways isn't even english lol. I mean it was a good idea but the wording has to be better on that type of a bar so it hits, because the way you worded it, not only does it not hit, it's probably the biggest miss in the battle. The Cage line as corny and not a very good connection, so it was a miss. The alternate line wasn't even really much of anything, I mean, technically it worked but it was so simple it didn't do much damage. The FGR/FDR line was a super reach, you can't just say "what if your name wasn't really your name, what if I edited your name so it works for this punch" lol feel me? Too shady was cool, not worded the best but well enough to at least hit, that was your best punch of your verse. The F in Way line doesn't work because no one uses that as a saying, like no I in team. Good wordplay, it's just madd forced. You have potential Told you just gotta do work on your wording and thinking of some better concepts. Foretold was cool for FGR, kind of simple. Stop flipping butler was stupid, obviously filler/throw away shit. Macho man Randy savage lines are played as fuck. Been used for awhile now basically the same way yours was, but worded better. Bye/bi? Seriously. Keep using wp like that you'll be smellin' da feet. Ass on the line was good, fresh flip, decent wording, it hits. Have her back was bleh, good wording but old used out concept. Decent battle, both have potential. I got FGR though. TLDR; V/ FGR EDIT: I missed the alternate/all turn 8 wordplay. Personally, I say alternate with the 'it' suffix and not the 'ate' suffix. I also know people say it both ways, so it isn't forced. I didn't even think there was wordplay, I was saying the connection was forced. Do to this evidence, I have both with 2 quotes and I like Told's better with the Alternate line being the LOTB. TLDR; V/ Untold