I didn't really feel that I was clicking with the storyline here. You touched on many different topics, and I found it a little bit difficult to follow what was going on. You started off with somewhat of a homelife and birth kind of idea, then we went on to your occupation, and we ended with a heaven reference. I was struggling to be able to follow the plot you were going with, which didn't allow me to get into it as much.
That being said, the writing style itself was dope as fuck. I found the rhyming to be brilliant, your vocabulary to have the perfect mixture of being advanced but not overdone, and it flowed perfectly throughout.
I think I could easily class one of your drops as one of my favourites, but for it to happen I'd have to be able to get into the story more which I was unable to do here.
None the less, awesome skills shown throughout. Keep writing.
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