Good battle...
Jah homie- I can tell u have never done this before but u still showed great potential. First off even tho it was 16 bars it seemed rather short. I know long bars seem wack or played at times so not saying go that direct route length them just a lil bit more. Gives more room for expansion on your topic. Feel me. Your imagery is actually pretty Good too just the content could have been better. Storys are a great way to grip the reader. So try that with also doing what u did there. Overall keep dropping and competing in topicals if possible u will become a threat.
Split- great story. Peer pressure is a motherfucker and partys is that motherfuckers home. Seen many start smoking from partys. Talking bout I only smoke when I'm drinking, yea for now. Great content and imagery.
Couldn't qoute from my phone but both had qoutables. Split got this tho with a great story that was real. Jah homie did his thing just have to get a grip of the concept of topicals, split is more seasoned.
VOTE... SPLIT
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