[Objective]

The storytelling was fluent, great choice of words along with a decent rhymescheme. The story was entertaining enough, kinda felt like it stopped kinda ''fast'' tho', almost as if it could continue for some follow-up verses, which would be dope as fuck in my opinion.

Overall I enjoyed the read and the only nitpicking I can do is that you used the word ''chance'' twice in the stream of ''ance''-rhymes. But yeah, nothing noteworthy, solid drop.

Keep it up.